A turf wars story.
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Turf wars story.
Disclaimer: the characters volpe and coraggio are not based off of any players, but there will be many players mentioned in this story.
Backstory: the story takes place in present time. so coraggio is a 17 year old who is the son of a man named volpe. Volpe was born into the mafia but coraggio does not know this. Coraggio's mother died after giving birth to him. Volpe has a good friend named jake who is practically an uncle of coraggio. Jake grew up on the streets of Japan after his parents and him traveled there for vacation, and his parents died in a car accident. Then the Japanese mafia (the yakuza) took him in. He is no longer in the yakuza but still has alles in it. He also has many allies in the different mobs. So let's begin. And please don't post until the chapter is finished.
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Coraggio opened the door his house as he called his father. "Hey dad can you come down here real quick" said coraggio. As volpe walks downstairs he says "hey son, what do you need?" "I was wondering..." said coraggio before the doorbell rang. Coraggio turned around and opened the door to see Jake standing there. "Hey Uncle Jake!" he said while waving his hand. "Hey coraggio what's going on?" said jake while making a waving motion back. "nothin much I was just about to ask my dad a question before you came in" said coraggio. " oh cool, speaking of which I need to speak to you dad, where is he?" "I'm right here" said volpe while standing on the steps. " oh ok, hey volpe I need to talk to you, it's VERY urgent, hope you don't mind coraggio" said jake as he stepped into the doorstep.
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"oh ok sure thing" said coraggio as he scratched his head an had a confused look on his face. "I wonder what could be so urgent...probably nothing really, just probably some economic stuff, or some sports crap, uncles face still did look urgent though" coraggio thought, but then shaked the thought off. " ok what do you need?" said volpe as he walked all the way down the steps and stood in front of jake. " here let's walk into the kitchen" said jake as he motioned to the kitchen. They both walked over toward the kitchen but then stopped to see coraggio standing behind them. " stay here son this is something private between me and jake" said volpe as he pointed behind coraggio "whatever..." coraggio said as he rolled his eyes and walked back towards the steps to sit down. So both jake and volpe walked into the kitchen. Jake sat down as volpe went to pull out a 70 year old bottle of unopened brandi and 2 glasses. "oh, your finally opening that one?
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yet until it became 75 years." said jake as he raised one eyebrow. "well ya know, ive only had it for 10 years, but it's aged already for 60, and I for some reason I feel like drinking it today." said volpe as he opened the bottle, poured it into 2 glasses and handed one of them to jake. "you do remember when you got this bottleright?" said jake. "Of course! It was one of our first missions together when we held up the liquor store and we stole this" said volpe as he chuckled a little. "and we ran from the cops like the armies of hell was chasing us." said jake as he laughed. "well I know you aren't here to relive old memories, what so urgent?" volpe said as he sipped his drink.
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well, I'm here with a warning, one of my informants told me that someone is going to try and kill you" said jake. Volpe stood there with a concerned face as he said, " is this informant trustworthy?" "he is my most trusted informant, I dont know how or when someone's going to try and kill you, but I just wanted to warn you."said jake as he stood up. "well thanks jake, I will be sure to be on alert from now on" said volpe. "sure thing man, hey can I use your restroom real quick?" said jake. "sure thing, you know where it's at" said volpe as he pointed toward the direction of the bathroom. "Thanks." as he said as he walked toward the bathroom. Volpe walked back over to his coraggio and said," so son what do you need?" " well dad, there's this party tonight and everyone's going to be there and I was wondering if I could go." said coraggio.
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"no."Said volpe. "come on dad you haven't even thought about it, there's gonna be a lot of cute girls there" coraggio whined. " I said no and thats final" said volpe in a stern voice. "DAD PLEASE!!" coraggio shouted. "I said NO! And if you ask again your going to be grounded for a month!" volpe shouted. "FINE!" coraggio said as he stomped upstairs. " I'm going out stay here until I get back or else I'm grounding you." said volpe as he walked out the door. Then jake came out of the bathroom and walked outside with him."what was all that yelling about?" jake asked. "coraggio wanted to go to a party tonight and I told him no, and now he's throwing a fit like he's 2." said volpe as he walked over to his car. " oh ok, we'll I'll see you later" said jake as he walked over and stepped into his car. "ok, Seeya." volpe
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said as he stepped into his car. Then he put his key into the keyhole and turned the car on. All of a sudden the car exploded. Jake looked over and said, "oh no, volpe.. VOLPE!!!!!" he then ran over and pulled volpe's dead and scorched body out. Then coraggio ran out and screamed, "Dad, DAD!!!!!" jake looked at the lifeless body and noticed a bullet shot in the head. "he, he's dead." jake said as he looked over at coraggio with a sad look.
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So this is the first chapter, tell me what you think, and the next chapter will be out next Friday, with actual players from the game mentioned. -
I read it.
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So far so good. Could be promising 👍
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Jon Allen wrote:
Thanks man, and greenman what did you think?So far so good. Could be promising 👍
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☯ƦōƝɪℕ☯ wrote:
Why was the guy shot in the head, before he was blown up? How'd he turn the key to trigger the detonator? If he was shot after then the triggerman would have had to get a headshot next to an exploding car. Right?Jon Allen wrote:
Thanks man, and greenman what did you think?So far so good. Could be promising 👍
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₲яєєŋϻɑɳÐɪʂɪƞfø wrote:
I did have that question about the headshot. For the explosion I just assumed that the guy had a remote detonator and blew up the car as soon as Volpe got next to the car, which had nothing to do with the key☯ƦōƝɪℕ☯ wrote:
Why was the guy shot in the head, before he was blown up? How'd he turn the key to trigger the detonator? If he was shot after then the triggerman would have had to get a headshot next to an exploding car. Right?Jon Allen wrote:
Thanks man, and greenman what did you think?So far so good. Could be promising 👍
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Also you can't pull a scorched body out of a car that quickly. Since jake pulled the body out, then the other guy ran over. It's assumed it only took a matter of seconds. Doesn't make sense in my head.
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If you wanna PM me the one next week, I could look it over and help with with the small nuances if you like
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₲яєєŋϻɑɳÐɪʂɪƞfø wrote:
I'm going to explain the whole shot to the head and the detonation in the next chapter. Also i was not. Very clear with him pulling the body out, but it did take a few minutes, I just didn't go into that much detail with it.Also you can't pull a scorched body out of a car that quickly. Since jake pulled the body out, then the other guy ran over. It's assumed it only took a matter of seconds. Doesn't make sense in my head.
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Jon Allen wrote:
Sure I will do that.If you wanna PM me the one next week, I could look it over and help with with the small nuances if you like
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Oh I see. Okay well I'll wait. Sorry if I seemed judgemental! I'm just giving feedback. I think it sounds like a cool story!
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₲яєєŋϻɑɳÐɪʂɪƞfø wrote:
It's fine, I'm all for constructive criticism and I like to know if things don't make sense, but thanks 😊Oh I see. Okay well I'll wait. Sorry if I seemed judgemental! I'm just giving feedback. I think it sounds like a cool story!
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