Need help with a bully. EASTMAN

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mr glock Apr 23, 2013

Need help with a bully. EASTMAN
mr glock Apr 23, 2013

Capo of BARNET LONDON EASTMAN (Bully needs a match)
Hyena Apr 23, 2013

Hmmmmm, I like the intro but needs more body to the story. I'm just feeling lost. What help are you wanting? Do you need to wash his car and not have a hose? And why are you shouting EASTMAN? Is that a local school, and you're preparing for a rally? Why are you helping this bully anyway? Really you should avoid bullies, they can get aggressive when provoked. And what qualifies this guy as a bully? Has he captured every turf you planted? Has he taunted you? Sorry but this story really left me wanting more. As such I am only giving you half a star and a do not read review for your story.
UnknownAssassin Apr 23, 2013

Hyena wrote:
Hmmmmm, I like the intro but needs more body to the story. I'm just feeling lost. What help are you wanting? Do you need to wash his car and not have a hose? And why are you shouting EASTMAN? Is that a local school, and you're preparing for a rally? Why are you helping this bully anyway? Really you should avoid bullies, they can get aggressive when provoked. And what qualifies this guy as a bully? Has he captured every turf you planted? Has he taunted you? Sorry but this story really left me wanting more. As such I am only giving you half a star and a do not read review for your story.

I agree Hyena. He lead up was going strong but when it was reaching the climax, he dropped off and left everyone hanging, waiting for more that would never come. I'll give him 1/10 for attempt but next time, please give the lead up more emotion and build on it.
Hyena Apr 23, 2013

I was bored so I asked Eastman. He didn't realise you were upset as you didn't ask him to give you a break.

Always try for polite communication if you are starting from a weaker position.
gunstreet grrl Apr 24, 2013

😂😂😂
So if I shout EASTMAN are you gonna come at me too? And why must everything reach a crescendo or climax? What is this, a police state?

Leave a little room for wonder you guys... Geez...